Nov
02

How much explication do mental excursions require?

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Journeys

When I adventured far from shore
   I felt a loss of self-control
   I felt I touched another soul
   I felt myself as less than whole.

I’ve seen that look in travelers’ eyes
   as if they’d been that way before
   as if they’d roam forever more
   as if they needed to explore.

I’ve been to children’s yesterdays
   where starlight shines in every eye
   where rainbows fill the morning sky
   where even cats and dogs can fly.

I’ve heard the stirrings of the dead
   whose faces fill a dismal day
   whose voices echo neath the quay
   whose presence is a breath away.

[experimenting with anaphora]

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4 Comments

1

This is very good. Just enough lightness in the 3rd stanza to make it more about thinking and sensing than about the emotions evoked. Anaphora you, I gives a star and a salute!

2

Nicely written. A smooth flowing piece with some things to mull while reading. And yes, cats and dogs do fly!

3
the cheese whisperer
November 2nd, 2011 at 1:56 AM

You really get around. btw–very nicely done.

4

Your experiment is a success! I love the journey in every stanza and feel the repetition enhances the beauty and intensity of this poem that has taken my breath away!

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